Feedback, Development, Breakdown on Group Pitch

 Today Saskia and I presented our idea's to Mike and Matt. They liked our idea and gave us some feedback. They thought the importance of what the main character is wearing if vital to the memorability and iconic look of the character. Over the next couple days we will look for a costume that fits our film. 

They also gave the idea of the main character would be resuscitating a man, seeing if he is alive before then killing him?

Another idea was that there is a girl in the club that the man isn't touching. She is hyperventilating, this would give us more to film to fill out the in the opening sequence. 

She would be terrified and upset

This feedback was useful, and when we come together as a group we will discuss what we want to include moving forward. 

Developments

We agreed the shattered glass was to cliché, so we decided on a regular mirror. 

We liked the idea of the girl, so as a group we are going to add that in to fill out our opening sequence. 

The main character will have a memorable outfit. 

We were planning of using an A2 boy as our main character but yesterday we found out we can't use them due to exams moving forward. Because of this we are looking for an A1 to play the main guy. 

New Outline, Full Break Down of What Happen 

• man in club sitting on chair, no shirt on and listening to music 
• shot of his back 
• shot of his his back/side profile (focussing on ear)
• shot of his hands then feet with a hand on the floor. 
• shots of the club, lights, different features
• cut to man crawling, begin on his legs then follows him up with blood trailing him
• camera cuts back to a behind shot of 
• Slight sigh from killer, puts on coat and stands up as he. Music cuts to loud, soundtrack
• One long take of killer putting on coat, picking up hammer and slowly walking to guy crawling
• We saw his whole persons walking through this nightclub esc hallway with pink and purple lights
• We then cut to the man crawling again and the cameras at his level, music cuts back to being played out of earphone
• We see the killer striking his hammer down, (music cuts back to loud and soundtrack) and then cut before impact to girl in the corner gasping
• Cut back to behind of killer, camera pans when he slowly looks over to see her sitting there terrified
• Then cut to bunch of more dead bodies on ground. They are all dead and bloody. Music is still soundtrack.
• Cut to rings as well on dead people, same ring on all of them - criminal syndicate type beat. 
• Silhouette of man walking out with lights. He leaves girl alone, she is alive.